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"From Ponytail to Pallu"

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Part 5

The fifth morning of Vansh’s saree challenge began earlier than usual. The early rays of sunlight slanted through the cream curtains of Vinita’s room, bathing everything in a golden glow. Outside, the mild hum of temple bells could be heard, mingled with the low call of a vegetable vendor echoing through the lane.

Vansh sat cross-legged on the cotton mat, his long hair still slightly damp from the bath, wrapped in a towel around his shoulders. He was in his night kurti, fidgeting nervously. After yesterday’s surprisingly public coin distribution event, he had expected a relaxed day, maybe a salwar or kurti.

But his mother had other ideas.

Vinita emerged from the wardrobe with a satisfied expression, holding up a rich red saree with a thick gold border. Draped over her arm was a matching royal blue blouse — full-sleeved, high-necked, and neatly pressed.

“Today is important,” she said.

Vansh blinked. “Important for what?”

“For you. This is Day Five. You’re halfway through your challenge,” she said, smiling. “Time to start dressing with full discipline.”

He eyed the saree warily. “It looks too formal.”

She ignored his hesitation. “This blouse is my favorite. You’ll love the way it shapes the shoulders. And you need full sleeves today.”

He didn’t argue. Maybe he was too tired. Maybe some part of him was too used to this now. Slowly, he got up and reached for the blouse, sliding his arms into it. It was cool against his skin but quickly warmed up as it hugged his arms and back.

The sleeves reached down to his wrists, ending in golden piping. The fit was tight — not uncomfortable, but very... firm. He squirmed a little as he fastened the back hooks with his mother’s help.

“Now the petticoat,” she said, handing him the matching red one.

Vansh slipped it on, tying the drawstring snug around his waist. He could already feel the anticipation building in his stomach — he’d worn heavy sarees before, but something about the formal color, the tight blouse, and the early hour made this feel serious.

Vinita unfolded the saree like it was a ceremonial cloth. She knelt down and began pleating it with practiced fingers.

“Lift your arm,” she instructed.

He obeyed. She neatly tucked the pleats into the front of the petticoat, pressed down the pleats to keep them from puffing up, and stood to drape the pallu.

The pallu was long and thick — she pulled it over his shoulder, pleated it again near his bust, and pinned it tightly to the blouse, right over his left chest.

The red and gold looked striking against the royal blue blouse. The contrast was stunning.

He looked down at himself.

“Jewelry,” she said next, opening the wooden box on the dresser.

A thin gold necklace was clasped around his neck. Two medium-sized jhumkas were clipped onto his ears. Then came a dozen glass bangles on each wrist — red and gold — that jingled softly every time he shifted.

Vinita picked up the steel comb next and patted the stool. “Hair.”

Vansh sat down without complaint.

She began parting it — a dead-center parting, firm and sharp. She used the fine edge of the comb and dipped her fingers in jasmine oil again, pressing the sides flat. His eyes fluttered shut as she pulled the comb through slowly, untangling each knot.

Then, with a rhythmic twist, she pulled the thick hair into a tight low bun. She secured it with three black pins, then a net. Over that, she pinned a fresh garland of jasmine — thick and white.

The scent surrounded him like a perfume cloud.

“There,” she said, stepping back. “Stand up.”

Vansh did. The saree shimmered slightly under the light. The full sleeves kept his posture straight. The bun was so tight he couldn’t look side to side without turning his whole neck.

She placed a small maroon bindi between his brows and dusted a bit of compact powder over his nose and cheeks. Then she stood beside him, adjusting the pleats once again, tugging the pallu taut across his chest.

He turned to the mirror.

The reflection startled him.

It wasn’t just the saree or the bun or the jewelry. It was the way everything held together — like he belonged in it.

The figure in the mirror wasn’t a boy being punished.

It looked like a young woman ready to attend a wedding.

Vinita smiled. “Perfect. Vanshika is ready.”

He didn’t speak for a while. The silence settled between them like a third person in the room.

Then finally he murmured, “Maa… this blouse is too tight.”

She laughed softly. “That’s how it’s meant to be.”

He gave her a half-smile. “And the bun?”

She looked at him through the mirror. “It’s holding your head high.”

They walked to the kitchen together. The jhumkas bounced against his jaw. The bangles clinked as he poured tea into steel cups.

By late morning, Vansh was already beginning to feel the constraints of his carefully crafted appearance. The red saree, as grand as it looked, was proving to be difficult to move in. Every pleat, every pinned edge reminded him to walk slower, sit straighter, and keep his back rigid.

And the blouse — his god, the blouse.

The royal blue full-sleeved blouse gripped his arms like a second skin. It restricted even the smallest gestures. He couldn’t fold his arms without discomfort. Raising a hand to fix his hair? Forget it. And yet, that tightness across the chest and shoulders added to the illusion his mother had intended — one of poise, grace, and discipline. But it also made breathing feel like work.

He shuffled into the kitchen where Nehal, his six-year-old sister, was peeling boiled potatoes with comical dedication.

“Don’t mess up the shape,” he said, pouring water from the steel jug into a glass. His bangles clinked loudly with every movement.

Nehal looked up, grinning. “Aunty Vanshika is giving instructions now?”

He rolled his eyes but didn’t say anything. His bun felt too tight to allow eye-rolling.

His mother entered behind him and took the glass from his hand. “Put this back on the tray properly. You’re not here to half-do things.” Her tone was light, but firm.

Vansh nodded and fixed the placement of the tray. As he did, a few droplets of water landed on his pallu. He quickly tried to wipe them, but they left a slightly darker patch on the silk-like red fabric.

“Maa, this pallu is too high,” he muttered, trying to adjust it.

“No, it’s just right,” she responded. “You’re not meant to keep fidgeting. Let the saree carry itself. You’re walking too fast anyway.”

Vansh wanted to scream.

The jasmine garland in his bun released a stronger scent every time he moved his head even slightly. His scalp itched faintly under the weight of the pins. His earrings swayed with even the smallest shift of his neck. And the bangles? They had a mind of their own.

After lunch — which he helped serve with all the awkwardness of someone trying to carry plates without wrinkling a pleated saree — he excused himself and went to his room.

Finally, he sat down.

For the first time in hours, he just… exhaled.

He looked at himself in the mirror on the wardrobe door. The deep red and gold saree still sat perfectly in place. The middle-parted bun looked untouched, with fresh jasmine forming a tight crown around it. His cheeks had developed a soft sheen from the light makeup Vinita had insisted on applying after breakfast.

But his eyes? They looked dull. Bored. Disconnected.

His phone buzzed on the table. A college WhatsApp group chat had 93 unread messages. He didn’t feel like reading any of them. What could he even say? That he was dressed like a Lakshmi calendar model?

The challenge had seemed humorous at first. Playful. Even empowering in an odd way. But now, he was feeling caged — wrapped in nine yards of expectation, literally.

He turned on the fan and immediately regretted it — the pallu began flapping, and he scrambled to pin it tighter. One side of his blouse sleeve had twisted up slightly, and adjusting it through the saree layers was impossible without disrobing half his dignity.

“Maa!” he called out, defeated. “Can I change into a kurti?”

“No,” her voice came from the living room. “That’s not how grace works.”

He clenched his teeth. “I’m not even going outside!”

She didn’t reply.

The ceiling fan whirred above, indifferent to his suffering.

He lay back slowly on the bed, careful not to disturb the bun. Even lying down required adjusting the pallu to one side and placing the braid (from yesterday) carefully over the pillow.

His fingers hovered over his phone. Then, almost impulsively, he opened his messages and tapped on the one person who could laugh with him without judgment.

Vansh: “Bored to death. Rescue me.”
Stuti: “Still alive in that saree prison?”
Vansh: “Wearing red. Blouse tighter than a drum. Bun like concrete. Please say I can come over.”
Stuti: “You’re actually asking to step out like that??”
Vansh: “I’ve lost shame. Just want fresh air and someone who doesn’t call me Lakshmi every five minutes.”
Stuti: “Come over. I’m sending the scooty. But only if you promise to wear those jhumkas proudly.”
Vansh: “Done.”

He didn’t know if he was being brave or foolish.

But he was suffocating. And at this point, even a room with Stuti and her loud laughter felt like oxygen.

Vinita was skeptical at first.

“You’ll go out dressed like this?”

“You told me I have to wear saree the whole day,” he argued.

She raised an eyebrow. “But outside?”

“I’m not ashamed,” he said, not entirely truthfully. “I just want to see a friend.”

She folded her arms, then slowly nodded. “Take a shawl. Be back by 10.”

He threw a light cream shawl over his shoulders, tucked in the pallu, adjusted his pleats one last time, and stepped out.

As he walked down the stairs, Nehal called out behind him: “Aunty Vanshika, don’t forget your purse!”

He sighed but chuckled too.

Maybe it wasn’t all that bad. Maybe he just needed a break — from rules, from pins, from being watched.

And if Stuti could offer that?

Then for one evening, he was all hers.

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Discussion (5)

Sai035
Sai035 11 months ago

Great plot. Please post the next part soon

Anbeena
Anbeena 11 months ago

Viana, how to change our profile picture like yours. I already added a pic, but it doesn't come. No options were seen for changing it. 😞. Can you help me pls...🙏

viana
viana Author 11 months ago

u can't change it

Jerusha
Jerusha 11 months ago

Loved every bit of it 🌟, eagerly waiting for the continuation ♡⁠(⁠>⁠ ⁠ਊ⁠ ⁠<⁠)⁠♡

Anbeena
Anbeena 11 months, 1 week ago

Super start Viana sweety. Looking forward to read greater, sexier second part. 💓

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